I would have just posted a comment but wordpress wouldn’t let me.<\/p>\n
The story shows great improvements in terms of technical writing, you’ve made it flow a lot smoother, but I’m afraid that’s all the praise I can offer.<\/p>\n
In terms of character development it only serves to make the character even flatter than he already was. Sorry, but if it keeps going like this you might have to amend the character profile to include psychopath.<\/p>\n
In terms of greater Zone continuity the issues it presents are very serious. Meaker, I don’t know if you’ve been consciously building to this, but the way things are headed you’re setting up you’re character for a power struggle with the legitimate leadership of Brooks and Slater. This could have huge repercussions.<\/p>\n
The biggest problem I think that the story brings up isn’t limited just to its content. It involves all of us, the authors. We’ve split into groups and are trying to bring Zyracuse in very different directions. While new and varied ideas are the lifeblood of any creative endeavor there is a point where they become too divisive.<\/p>\n
Just recently, there was talk about the demilitarization of the CC and making it more informal. This story seems to do the opposite. If we can’t come up with a consensus on something like this we’ll never be able to really create anything concrete.<\/p>\n
I don’t want to stifle anyone but I think there needs to be a great deal more discussion and cooperation on individual stories.<\/p>\n
I guess what I’m saying is:<\/p>\n
A zone divided against itself cannot stand.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"
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